成考英语作文满分揭秘（上）

      与其说是满分揭秘,不如说成评分标准解析。即英语作文想得满分,就得知道满分标准是什么。高中考试大纲明确规定评分的最高档是:使用了多种语法结构和词汇,语法构成或词汇方面错误极少,且为使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致;有效利用语句间的连接词语,全文结构紧凑。“文无第一,武无第二”参照多年的高考试卷,每篇高分作文都有其亮点,即在用词造句或结构安排上都有其独到之处。这给我们的启示是:要想获得高分,自己先找亮点。
　　
　　写作时在保证要点和信息齐备的基础上,只用一些普通的,简单(注意是简单不是简洁)的词语,或一律平铺直叙,那么写出的文章犹如白开水一般,内容虽然齐全,但十分单调,枯燥无味,毫无可读性,很难指望这样的作文能得高分。
　　
　　一篇文章的广度可能会影响这篇文章的深度,因此写作时应注意使用高级句式和复杂句型,以凸显文章层次,加入适当的连接词和过渡语,使文章结构紧凑,行文连贯,读起来耐人寻味。没有哪位阅卷老师不喜欢这样的阅读畅快感,印象分自然不会低。
　　
　　那么如何增加高考英语文章的亮点呢?大家可尝试这14个方法，今天先讲7个方法:
　　
　　1.长短句交叉使用
　　
　　行书之所以被称为“书法天下第一”,是因为其字大小各异,笔画长短不错落有致,极具艺术美感。同样,在英语写作中,一味地使用超长句和复杂句式也并非好好事,给人以炫技之感,华而不实;但满篇都是短句式肯定也不好,给人以小家子气,能力不行等印象。正确的写作手法是:根据需求在文中交替使用长短句,且辅以复合句、分词状语、伴随状语、强调句、倒装句、感叹句等,使文章显得极具美感,读起来英文特有的阅读质感自然而生。
　　
　　(1)合理分句合句,增强表达效果和连贯性
　　
　　例:中午我们晒太阳、吃野餐。休息了一会儿后,我们唱歌、跳舞,也有的在讲故事、下棋,大家玩得很开心。
　　
　　[一般句式] At noon we had a picnic in the sunshine. Then we had a short rest. Then we began to play happily. We sang and danced. Some told stories. Some played chess
　　
　　[优秀句式] At noon we had a picnic in the sunshine. After a short rest, we had great fun singing and dancing, telling stories and playing Chess.
　　
　　(2)强调句
　　
　　[一般句式] My parents praised Ah Fu warmly. It had saved my little sister bravely.
　　
　　[优秀句式] My parents praised Ah Fu warmly. It was our Ah Fu who had saved my little sister bravely.
　　
　　(3)由what、 which、 where等引导的从句,此处的引导词相当于中文的“所.....”有很强的概括力。
　　
　　[一般句式] We had to stand there to catch the offender.
　　
　　[优秀句式] What we had to do was(to) stand there, trying to catch the offender.
　　
　　2.避免同一词语重复使用
　　
　　为使文章可读性强,更生动,更有趣,表达效果佳,考生们在写作时要注意规避同一句式反复运用。在表达某个事物,讲述其共性时应避免使用同词语。如当想到“喜欢”一词,大家都会想到ike,如果在作文中频繁使用like,意思虽然能表达清楚,但会造成内容枯燥乏味,可读性大减。那如何来实现呢?在英语中不同的语言环境有不同的表达法,就“喜欢”二字,有love、 enjoy、 appreciate、 care for、 prefer、 favorite、 be fond of等。
　　
　　例:我喜欢看书,而我弟喜欢看电视。
　　
　　[一般句式] I like reading while my brother likes watching television.
　　
　　[优秀句式] I like reading while my brother enjoys watching television.
　　
　　3.以短语代替单词
　　
　　例1:他决定长大后当老师。
　　
　　[一般句式] He has decided to be a teacher when he grows up.
　　
　　[优秀句式」 He has made up his mind to be a teacher when he grows up.
　　
　　例2:他不大喜欢音乐。
　　
　　[一般句式] He doesn' t like music.
　　
　　[优秀句式] He doesn' t care much for music.
　　
　　例3:她告诉我问题现正在讨论中。
　　
　　[一般句式] She told me that the question was now being discussed.
　　
　　[优秀句式] She told me that the question was now under discussion.
　　
　　例4:我们家乡正在修建一条新的铁路。
　　
　　[一般句式] A new railway is being built in my hometown.
　　
　　[优秀句式] A new railway is under construction in my hometown.
　　
　　例5:有时我在超市碰见史密斯小姐。
　　
　　[一般句式] Sometimes I met Miss Smith in the supermarket.
　　
　　[优秀句式] Sometimes I came across Miss Smith in the supermarket.
　　
　　4.套用某些固定表达
　　
　　例1:她太累了,不能再往前走了。
　　
　　[一般句式] She was very tired. She couldn' t walk any farther.
　　
　　[优秀句式] She was too tired to walk any farther.
　　
　　例2:这部电影非常有趣,老师和学生都很喜欢。
　　
　　[一般句式] The film was very interesting. Both the teachers and the students liked it.
　　
　　[优秀句式] The film was so interesting that both the teachers and the students liked it.
　　
　　例3:你儿子已经长大,他现在可以自己照顾自己了。
　　
　　[一般句式] Your son is old. He can look after himself now.
　　
　　[优秀句式] Your son is old enough to look after himself now.
　　
　　5.灵活调整句子的语序
　　
　　英语句子一般排列为:主语+谓语+宾语。主语位于句子开头,谓语紧跟主语,宾语位于最后。但有时根据表达内容和口吻需要,可适当调整语序,以增强表达效果,使文章灵活多变,极富张力。
　　
　　例1:我们在校大门口见面,清早一起去那儿。
　　
　　[一般句式] We met at the school gate and went there together early in the morning.
　　
　　[优秀句式] Early in the morning we met at the school gate and went there together.
　　
　　例2:唯有如此你才能把它做好。
　　
　　[一般句式] You can do it well only in this way.
　　
　　[优秀句式] Only in this way can you do it well.
　　
　　例3:门开了,史密斯先生走了进来。
　　
　　[一般句式] The door opened and Mr. Smith came in.
　　
　　[优秀句式] The door opened and in came Mr. Smith.
　　
　　例4:在那座小山顶上有一座古庙。
　　
　　[一般句式] There stands an old temple at the top of the hill.
　　
　　[优秀句式] At the top of the hill stands an old temple.
　　
　　例5:窗户边坐着一个年轻妇女。
　　
　　[一般句式] A young woman sat by the window.
　　
　　[优秀句式] By the window sat a young woman.
　　
　　6.适时使用省略句
　　
　　省略句可使文章收到精炼、简洁明了的效果,并增强文章的可读性,让文章别具一格,大放异彩。因此,行文中适时加入省略句,有锦上添花之效。
　　
　　例1:他可能很忙。要是这样,我以后再来拜访。要是不忙,我现在可以见他吗?
　　
　　[一般句式] He may be busy.If he' s busy,I' ll call later. f he is not busy,can I see him now?
　　
　　[优秀句式] He may be busy.If so,I' ll call later. If not,, can i see him now?
　　
　　例2:如果天气好,我们就去,如果天气不好,我们就不去了
　　
　　[一般句式] If the weather is fine,we'll go. If it is not fine, we'll not go.
　　
　　[优秀句式] If the weather is fine,we'll go. If not, we won't go.
　　
　　例3他本可申请那份工作的,但他没有。
　　
　　[一般句式] He could have applied for that job. But he didn't do so.
　　
　　[优秀句式] He could have applied for that job, but he didn't.
　　
　　7.巧妙使用非谓语结构
　　
　　非谓语结构是高中英语学习中最常见的,也是考试时经常出现的基础语言结构。适当地运用此类表达法,可进一步精炼语句,给人以谙熟语法的印象。
　　
　　例1:罗宾逊先生听到这个坏消息时,情不自禁地哭了。
　　
　　[一般句式]Mr. Robinson couldn't help crying when he heard the bad news
　　
　　[优秀句式」 Hearing the bad news,Mr. Robinson couldn't help crying
　　
　　例2:他出生农民家庭,所以只上过两年学。
　　
　　[一般句式] As he was born into a peasant family, he had only two years of schooling.
　　
　　[优秀句式] Born into a peasant family, he had only two years of schooling.
　　
　　例3:我不知道他的地址,没法联系上他
　　
　　[一般句式] as I didn't know his address, I wasn't able to get in touch with him.
　　
　　[优秀句式] Not knowing his address, I wasn't able to get in touch with him.
　　
　　今天小编就讲到这里，希望上述的7点能够帮助到你!明天将继续讲《高考英语作文满分揭秘(下)》。