江苏成考英语作文二:网络投票的看法

       一、江苏成考的英语作文真题回放内容
　　
　　请阔读下面短文,并按照要求用英语写一篇150词左右的文章。
　　
　　In recent years Internet voting has become increasingly popular in China.People not only cast online votes themselves, but also urge others to vote for competitions like the"Most Beautiful Teacher"and the" Cutest Baby".
　　
　　Li Jiang, a high school student, is invited to vote in the "Best Police Officer" competition, organized by the local government to let the public have a better understanding of police officers'daily work. Li Jiang visits the website and reads all the stories. He is deeply moved by their glorious deeds. He is already thinking of becoming a policeman himself in the future.
　　
　　Su Hua is invited by his uncle to vote for his cousin in the" Future Singer"competition. He has already received three similar invitations this week. His uncle tells him that if his cousin wins the competition, the family will win an overseas tour for free. Su Hua likes his cousin very much, but he finds other singers perform even better. To vote or not to vote? This is a question that troubles him very much.
　　
　　二、范文
　　
　　Voting on the Internet is becoming more and more popular. Many people are invited to vote on some competitions. Some people can benefit from taking part in online voting, while some people are put into a dilemma over who they should vote for.
　　
　　I think that there are two major positive aspects of online voting as follows".For one thing, it can appeal to people taking an active part in all kinds of social events, For another, people can benefit from voting on the Internet,like Li Jiang mentioned in the passage, and get instant feedback.
　　
　　However, as far as' m concerned, online voting has begun to show its negative effects on people. Some people use their social networking resources to win competitions instead of counting on their own abilities, which obviously shows unfairness. What's more, sometimes online voting can make voters puzzled about who should be chosen.Which one is more important, emotion or fairness?To sum up, we should try to bring the advantages of online voting into full play,and reduce the disadvantages to the minimum at the same time. In that case, we will definitely make a better use of online voting.
　　
　　三、解析:
　　
　　①are invited属被动语态,作者运用多种表达法非常娴熟,注重保持文章表达方式多样性。
　　
　　②while引导的一个并列句,复杂句式运用使内容更丰富,阐述更合理。dilemma进退两难,高级词江,准确阐述现状,十分传神。
　　
　　③that引导的同位语从句,高级句式为文章添彩。major、positive、aspect属高级词汇、句话亮点多多。
　　
　　④长句式亮点很多:soil networking、obviously、unfa-irness属高级词汇。which引导的非限定性定语从句,高级句式。
　　
　　⑤哪个更重要?作者以反问形式提出异议,充分显示了辩证技巧。 emotion属高级词汇。
　　
　　⑥作者给出自己建议后,相信在线投票会变得越来越好。态度积极乐观,充满正能量。
　　
　　四、点评
　　
　　678招生考试信息网认为作者在阐述网络投票的优缺点时,每方面都列举了两个实例来证明,且每个事例都有详细的解释,不仅内容充实,理由也符合逻辑,充分显示了作者丰富的辨证技巧和语言组织能力。高级句式如并列句、定语从句、反问句等运用则丰富了文章表达方式,间接提升文章层次,亮点之一。678招生考试网认为作者应用了高级词汇如major、positiv、aspect、social networking、obviously、unfairness等运用则使阐述更精准,提升文章表达效果。总之,678招生信息网认为本篇满分佳作做到了结构合理,论述详细,符合逻辑,内容和细节兼顾,结构和层次清晰,各方面都堪称完美。
　　
　　五、译文
　　
　　在网上投票越来越受欢迎。很多人都被邀在一些比赛里投票。有些人可以从网上投票中获益,而有些人却陷入了他们应该投票给谁的两难境地。
　　
　　我认为网上投票有两个主要的积极方面。一方面,它可以吸引人们积极参加各种社会活动。另一方面,人们可以从网上投票中获益,如文章中提到的李江,并得到即时反馈。
　　
　　然而,就我个人而言,网上投票已经开始显示出它对人们的负面影响。有些人利用自己的社交网络资源来蠃得比赛,而不是依靠自已的能力,这显然是不公平的。更重要约是,有时网上投票会使选民对应该选择谁感到困惑。情感和公平,哪一个更重要?总之,我们应该充分发挥网上投票的优势,同时尽量减少不利因素的影响。惟其如此,我们才能会更好地利用网上投票。