成考英语作文:以《班规》谈想法的范文一

       一、真题回放内容
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　　阅读下面短文,然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。
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　　On the first day of her work, Sally found that a class full of problems was waiting for her; six teachers had quit before her. When she walked into the classroom,it was chaos: two boys were fighting in the far corner, yet the rest of the class seemed not to notice them; some girls were chatting and some were running about; paper,food packages and other garbage were littered around. Just when she was about to speak, a student rushed in and pushed her aside! He was twenty minutes late!
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　　Sally walked onto the platform, picked up a piece of chalk and wrote on the blackboard: Rule 1: We are family! All students stopped to look at her. And she continued with Rule 2, Rule 3... In the following weeks, sally worked out 10 class rules and posted them on the walls of the classroom. She patiently explained all the rules to the students and required everyone to follow them.
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　　Surprisingly, Sally was not driven out like the former teachers; instead, she won respect from the students.Over the year, she witnessed gradual change in the class.At the graduation ceremony, Just as she expected. she was very proud to stand with a class of care, manners and confidence.
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　　[写作内容]
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　　1.用约30个词概括上文的主要内容。
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　　2.用约120个词就班规谈谈你的想法,内容包括:(1)你们班最突出的问题是什么?(2)针对该间题你会设计一条什么班规?(3)你认为班规会带来什么影响?
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　　[写作要求]
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　　1.作文中可以使用亲身经历或虚构的故事,也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引用原文的句子。
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　　2.作文中不得出现真实姓名和学校名称。
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　　二、作文范文
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　　Confronted with the misbehavior of her new class, Sally emphasized the idea of“we are family"and regulated the students' conduct,which have shaped them to be confident and well behaved.
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　　One obvious problem with our class is the lack of team work.Everyone is minding their own business, thus giving rise to inefficiency in their study and even putting a limit to their potential.
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　　To address the issue,I would make it a rule that every Friday I divide them into groups of four and assign a project for them to complete.
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　　From where I stand, this rule will definitely exert a profound and far-reaching effect on students' academic performance. First and foremost,we can combine our skills and knowledge as well as motivate each other for greater achievements.Additionally, studying in a group will share our experiences in solving problems more efficiently as well as promote our teamwork spirit.
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　　三、作文范文解析
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　　①emphasize和 regulate两个高级词汇均是动词,简要阐述Sally的行为过程。
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　　②which引导的非限定性定语从句,准确讲述了故事的结果,678招生考试网认为作者语言高度浓缩,足见组织语言的“真功夫”。
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　　③obvious置于problem前,突出存在的问题。the lack of高级词组运用准确,正宗的英文表述法。
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　　④to address the issue,高级词组运用怜当。动词不定式置于句首,避免句子单调雷同,缺乏新意。
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　　⑤长句式内容丰富,逻辑合理阐准确。且 definitely、profound、far-reaching、academic和performance属高级词汇,作者词汇量令人佩服。
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　　⑥will开启的句子准确地表达了新规实行后可能的效果,内容积极正面,传递正能量。solve、efficient、as well as、promote等均是高级词汇。
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　　四、名师点评
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　　通读全篇，678招生考试信息网认为作者深谙各种从句运用之技,如 which引导的定语从句、where引导宾语从句做介词宾语、 where引导的宾语从句做介词宾语等,各种类型的从句层出不穷。高级句式和高级词江的运用在准确阐述文章内容基础上,还提升文章层次。thus、 to address from where I stand、 first and foremost等过渡短语的运用则使文章结构更紧凑,过渡更自然,行文连贯,读起来非常爽快。总之,678招生信息网认为本篇佳作要点齐全,结构清晰,逻辑合理,语法精妙,是一篇难得的临场佳作。
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　　五、译文
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　　莎莉面对的新班级的不端行为,她强调“我们是一家人”,规范学生的行为理念,塑造了他们自信、良好行为。
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　　我们班的一个明显的问题是缺乏团队工作。每个只专注于自己的事,从而导致他们的学习效率低下,甚至限制他们的潜力。
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　　解决这个间题。我会制定个规则:每到星期五把他们分成四组,分配一个项目来完成。
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　　从我的立场来看,这一规定必将对学生的学业成绩产生深远而积极的影响。
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　　首先,我们可以把我们的技能和知识结合起来,互相激励,取得更大的成就。此外,小组学习将有助于我们更有效地解决问题,提升我们的团队精神。